Slice of Life: Shamrock 16 of 31
For the month of March, I'll be writing with the Slice of Life community. Disclaimer: I'll be writing every day so the writing will be a bit unpolished most days. Thanks to Two Writing Teachers for bringing this community together and for inspiring me to try to find the stories that surround me each day.
Today I am also joining the #PoetryFriday celebration at TeacherDance. I'm looking forward to filling this blog with poetry in April.
Darkness creeps,
leaves
fold,
flowers droop,
the plant
sleeps.
Sunlight dawns,
leaves
rise,
flowers dance,
the plant
awakens.
© Cathy L. Mere, 2018
Today I am also joining the #PoetryFriday celebration at TeacherDance. I'm looking forward to filling this blog with poetry in April.
Darkness creeps,
leaves
fold,
flowers droop,
the plant
sleeps.
Sunlight dawns,
leaves
rise,
flowers dance,
the plant
awakens.
© Cathy L. Mere, 2018
I love how the darkness creeps and the sunlight yawns--such simple but impactful combinations.
ReplyDeleteIs that true? I have one and I keep watering it every night because it looks like it is wilting and then it is fine the next day! Such a great example of nonfiction poetry!!! Thank you - I love "flowers dance, the plant awakens."
ReplyDeleteClare
Wonderful to see a poem about shamrocks. I have one, too, and you've captured them perfectly, Cathy. A 'feeling good' plant to have! Happy St. Patrick's Day!
ReplyDeleteHappy St. Patrick's Day, Cathy. I, like Linda, am excited to see a shamrock poem.
ReplyDeleteI thought you were going to tell us the plant was drooping because it needed water, I had to reread your piece twice. I call that reading closely for meaning.
ReplyDeleteMy kids kept telling me that the shamrocks needed water (in the evening). Too bad I didn't have your poem to show them :-)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful words! This is a wonderful picture of such a delicate shamrock. I like the change in your poem from darkness to sunlight.
ReplyDeleteI like the balance between the two stanzas.
ReplyDeleteI think Melanie accidentally gave you a powerful revision! Yawn would much more fun than Dawn!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Kay about the balance between the stanzas.