Did You See Her? Slice of Life Challenge 6 of 31

Slice of Life Challenge 
Thanks Stacey and Ruth:  Two Writing Teachers
#slice 2013   5 of 31  Oops!  6 of 31 (Thanks, Mom)


For days there is a rumor of her arrival.  "Snow is coming," say the people.  "Will she be here?" the royals wonder.  There was a rumbling she could change her mind.  Still everyone prepares for her impending visit as they rush about to get all that is needed.

Finally the day of the Royal Ball arrives:  the food is prepared, the glasses shine, the tables are arranged, and the carpeted dance floor is ready.  Raising their instruments the band begins to play and guests promenade into the ballroom.  Rain makes an early entrance to the party.  Ice is noticed talking with Temperature.  Wind blew in quickly and got the attention of the crowd.  Still, where was Snow?  Was she coming?  The crowd whispered among themselves wondering if she would make an appearance.

Snow had a reputation for being unpredictable.  She did what she wanted.  That's part of the reason others were so fascinated by her.  Sometimes she'd say she was coming and then not show up at all.  Other times, she would sneak in unexpectedly shaking up planned events.

Hours passed and Snow still had not arrived.  People began to doubt she would attend the event.  "That Snow, she is so flighty," they gossiped.  The music continued to play as Wind, Rain, and Temperature dominated the dance floor.

Suddenly a hush fell upon the crowd.  Everyone turned to look.  For a moment, Wind could not move.  Rain, in her gray floor-length dress, turned to look and then dashed out of the room.  There, at the top of the dark staircase, stood Snow.  She was stunning.  Her white gown glistened; blanketing the room in her beauty.  Each stitch on her dress had been exquisitely sewn with unique style.  Her gown seemed to say "come closer" and "stay away" all at the same time.

Ice stood back, wondering if Snow would speak to him this time.  Temperature immediately rushed to take her hand as Wind moved closer captivated by her allure.  Snow slowly stepped into the room; shy at first, but soon drifting down the flowing staircase with growing confidence.  The crowd seemed frozen by her elegance.  Trees bowed as she walked by them; bending their branches in awe of her power.  Moon smiled as Snow's gown reflected the glow of his shiny cheeks.  Though Snow was unpredictable, Moon couldn't help but feel a sense of pride every time he saw her.

A soft murmur soon turned into a thunder of conversation as guests chatted about Snow's arrival.  The ballroom, moments ago silent, again became filled with laughter, music and dancing.  The royals knew Snow's arrival would make this an event sure to be on the front page of every newspaper.  The reporters quickly arrived to interview Snow and take pictures, hoping to capture her stunning beauty.  Photographers searched for the picture that would capture the smoothness of her skin, the glimmer in her eye, and the contagious sparkle of her smile.

Snow danced for a bit with Temperature; their steps on the dance floor watched carefully by all.  Temperature had a way of making her feel flushed.  It wasn't long until Wind cut in for his dance.  Wind swept Snow around the dance floor until she felt dizzy.  Snow soon realized she must go.  The hot crowded room was making her uncomfortable.  She wanted to get back out into the cool air.  She wanted time to walk and to think.  With a quiet nod to Moon, Snow stepped back out into the dark night.

As mysteriously as she had arrived, she disappeared.  Temperature and Wind were unsure what had happened.  The royals were disappointed she had to leave so soon.  The newspapers and reporters all talked about her for weeks following.  She had not been seen since the event. Once again everyone searched for Snow.  Snow read the papers and smiled to herself.  She liked keeping them guessing.  Who knew where she'd turn up next?




Comments

  1. What fun to read! Truly, I am observing the same ballroom here, although snow is playing slightly harder to get! Your personification of snow (and the others) is so well done. How long did you work on this?

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  2. This was fun to read, too. The whole scene you set captured my imagination. Well done, Cathy.

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  3. Wow, Cathy....I love this. What talent...and yes, how long did you work on this...the words and pictures they make just flow with ease. I am in Evansville, IN until tomorrow...and Snow just breezed by here...and she did not even show her face in Toledo!

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  4. You have written a beautiful fairy tale about snow. Love it! Particularly delightful as I am enjoying my first snow day in two years! Thanks for sharing.

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  5. FAB-U-LOUS! What a party it was and you were there to record it all. You said it was fun to write, but oh, it was fun to read. This should be a picture book, hmmm, who would you like to illustrate it?

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  6. This was beautiful to read! It's spring break for me, but we're in the middle of a cold snap. I felt like I'd been swept away to a fairy tale reading this piece.

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  7. Just perfect. I agree with Elsie - a picture book - a fairy tale of snow! Pinning this to remember . . .

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  8. A standing ovation for this story! HUZZAH!!

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  9. Wow, that's beautiful Cathy!! Again, I applaud your creativity.

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  10. I've noticed lots of personification lurking around slices this year. Your craft is remarkable.
    Thanks for writing,
    Ruth

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  11. WOW! I agree with the others! This is so very publishable! I absolutely got goose bumps reading this paragraph:
    Rain, in her gray floor-length dress, turned to look and then dashed out of the room. There, at the top of the dark staircase, stood Snow. She was stunning. Her white gown glistened; blanketing the room in her beauty. Each stitch on her dress had been exquisitely sewn with unique style. Her gown seemed to say "come closer" and "stay away" all at the same time.

    Love the people you have allowed these elements to become. Wow...
    Thanks so much for sharing!
    Trish

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  12. Beautiful! She visited here too - not long enough to require our schools to close to greet her, but enough to make everything beautiful.

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  13. Very nicely done. Fun to read and picture in my head the real events of nature in the personifications here.

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  14. Oh my goodness, Cathy! I loved this piece!!! If you don't mind, I think I'd like to share it with my first graders. :)

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  15. Cathy, this is just fantastic! If only Snow would stay for a bit at our house... I miss the dazzle and excitement of her entrance.

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  16. Seriously cool. I loved the personification of the the snow, the fairy tale like quality of the piece. This is a piece I'd like to share with my creative writers when we start fiction writing next week. It may inspire a few

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  17. I enjoyed your piece immensely. Your writing craft creates such a visual a beautiful mentor text o demonstrate personification, visualization. You're writing is inspiring.

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  18. Exquisitely done, Cathy. There are so many parts that work well, but those final few sentences are such a pleasure to read. Thank you!

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  19. Impressive. I wouldn't know where to begin. I would say a productive snow day for you. Picture book writing in your future?

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  20. I'm guessing you had a snow day. I laughed several times when I read your post. Very creative and very well done!

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  21. Wow, wow, wow! What a gorgeous piece of writing! I agree with Elsie- this should be a picture book! Kind of reminds me of TWILIGHT COMES TWICE. Gorgeous writing!

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  22. First of all Cathy, thank you so much for your kind comment earlier today.

    This post left me wondering at the start .. I kept backing up and rereading ... is it really snow that she's talking about? No, she's speaking of it so majestically, it can't be. Living in the land of ice and snow and frigid temperatures, I find I am at the point now where I just want it all to desperately disappear, yet your post was a bit of a reminder of the peace and beauty of this time of year!

    Thank you, you're writing is exquisite and powerful!

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  23. That was beautiful! I know your neice will love this fairy tale! Your talent amazes me.

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